tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4967620241272457234.post8678899922866588598..comments2010-11-21T20:16:39.847-08:00Comments on Donner und Licht: Large and in Charge return from Hiatus.Unknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4967620241272457234.post-92141009792775403982009-12-29T10:41:34.492-08:002009-12-29T10:41:34.492-08:00I like it, and I definitely think it would be wort...I like it, and I definitely think it would be worth the rewrite. While I enjoy the exposition at the beginning, I think it may make the story line easier to follow if you add some dialogue, or some mention, of the men in David's group before the betrayal. Good work.ACSchaferhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04184184607262823140noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4967620241272457234.post-39809781503035697632009-12-29T09:44:17.350-08:002009-12-29T09:44:17.350-08:00Sorry for the handful of typos. If anyone thinks ...Sorry for the handful of typos. If anyone thinks this story is worth expanding, tell me and I'll clean it up.Heydon Hensley, LCSWhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02834244186701776969noreply@blogger.com